The wait was over,she had arrived .The light flashed and then after the habitual time lag came the sound ,more “kick-ass” than any of those super-expensive sound systems. The people who were standing around me started to scramble for cover they didn't want to be out in the storm ,they wanted to feel her..too but from the comfort of their living rooms. I was tad more adventurous though ,as I looked up and saw her ,I saw how murderously beautiful she was.She reminded me of the bollywood beauty queens, unlike them however,she was allowed to be dark,fat and ill-mannered. Nature wasn't stereotyped,great nor was I .I looked on.. blissfully unaware of the fact that every one in the thoroughfare thought that I was the biggest weirdo ever to set foot on the face of the earth .Then it came unbiased and unprejudiced she dint care if I was rich or poor,well dressed or otherwise, all she cared about was getting me drenched and the fact I had no umbrella meant that I had to oblige. Cosmic justice put two choices in front of me get drenched in the rain,or take an autorikshaw ride home I would have chosen the latter had it not been “for the autorikshaw affair” and the fact that she was looking so damn beautiful. I started to walk fully aware that dad will kill me when he sees me wet. The occasional bolt of lightning lightened up my senses as I walked along ,my shirt sticking to me,my shoes making weird noises,but I was feeling great and that's what really mattered.
I tried a to do stuff with my hair,didn't work though .Then again usually it didn't .The streets were totally empty now a few minutes of rain had scared them all away ,apart from the raindrops and the occasional roar of thunder their was an eerie silence all around me.I did have her for company or did I.....,darkness was gradually setting in and she was fading away into the distantness .Since the seductress was gone now ,there was no point in walking,I saw an auto approaching .Then with the dexterity of a bojpuri film star I whistled for it,it stopped like clockwork. Then still confused about what all had happened till then ,I got in.
p.s:her picture the next day/
Whoa! There’s a BIG difference, really between this one and "A Long Walk”. Not just in terms of subject and content, but also literary excellence.
ReplyDeleteTo my best knowledge, if I dare comment on this: Nature wasn’t stereotyped, ‘neither’ was I.
Another thing. About the lightning, lightening up your senses. I didn’t get the emotion you tried to convey.
Aand. You have this typo error: ‘their’ instead of ‘there’.
“I tried a to do stuff with my hair,didn't work though”
Lol. It works with gel. But the readers can almost see your fake dejected pout at that. :P
I love the word “eerie silence”. It sort of gives me this chill of a benumbing excitement.
This was a truly enjoyable read. :)